Linking with Poetry Jam for the "Graveyard" prompt with Laurie.
God pours life into death and death into life without a drop being spilled. ~Author Unknown
It was a grave decision when he took beauty over deeper things
like a porcelain vase he just had to touch
he reached out his hand to caress
the detailed edges
and then
in a moment
he was too
far gone
breath
by breath
he gave
all he
had
to her
until
there was
nothing left
to give
he lost it all
his wealth
the beauty of true love
his heart and the girl
leaving a vacuum in his soul the size of a mass grave
yes it was a grave decision when he took beauty over deeper things.
it's sad that he lost everything..beautiful lines carrie
ReplyDeletea grave decision indeed when one looks for the gross leaving out the subtle...nice play on 'grave' Carrie...love the layout that looks like a bowl of hollowness...
ReplyDeleteSqueezing out the very last bit of everything he had...the format fits so well. Nice lesson, well written, Carrie.
ReplyDeleteNicely done and a great way of making the prompt come alive. Always go for the deeper things.
ReplyDeleteNicely done with what I assume is a form around line lengths. A sad tale however.
ReplyDeletewhen you decide to settle for what is temporary
ReplyDeleteyour treasures will only be temporary you know...
i pity him a bit...
A poem of lessons and loss. A unique approach to the prompt!
ReplyDeleteI like how the layout emphasizes the loss and nothingness. This is indeed sad.
ReplyDeleteA vacuum in his soul the size of a mass grave...this is a great line and expresses the devastation brilliantly. Not an uncommon scenario...the stuff novels and literature have been based on over the centuries. Enjoyed the way you used a form as well Well done !
ReplyDeletewell penned ~
ReplyDeleteSo sad...
ReplyDeleteReally touched my emotions, Carrie. To lose absolutely everything is devastating.
ReplyDeleteBeauty over deeper things...
ReplyDeleteThere's so much that life has to offer. It's really "grave", but most don't realize even after they go to their grave....
Touching as usual, Carrie...
I like this poem and the different approach to the subject
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