Photograph by Anita Sedberry at Harold Ross Fine Art Photography.
Life is a long road on a short journey. ~James Lendall
Basford
Life is crazy that way
A bird that flies away and home all at once
It reaches tall
Like a boy at 16
And then stoops
Low like an exotic dancer
Leaving us mesmerized and complacent one time or another
It quivers like a flame
Yet is still like fog on a winding road
it moves slow like an old man’s stance
and then zooms fast like a dragon fly
it is erratic like a small child
and then floats on air like a ghost
it is a million loads of laundry
and yet just one true kiss
the kind one never forgets
long after the flame has burned out.
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Carrie, I'm liking your write of constant figures of speech. Quickly you jump into simile usage of "like" comparison until the very end. My favorite of these is the 'quivering flane' as opposed to the 'foggy road' (driving is a challenge to me).
ReplyDeleteI remember a few kisses, doesn't every one? Most vivid are two, one was my first time with a girl wearing glasses.
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Thanks Jim, and yes, there are always those few kisses never forgotten.
DeleteMy first kiss was at the yard gate when the lilac bush was in full bloom. The smell of lilacs will always bring back that memory!!
ReplyDeleteSounds like it could be a lovely poem in itself Bev!
DeleteLove the back and forth, zig zag thought patterns in this poem! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks my friend!
DeleteLaundry divides and replicates itself when I am not looking.
ReplyDeleteAin't that the truth for us all?! LOL
DeleteEnjoyed every bit of it. Love all the beautiful images coming one after another. Specially love the images of an exotic dancer and an erratic child. Beautiful, Carrie.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Sumana! I really enjoyed your's as well.
DeleteI could feel the movement throughout the poem. Oh, and the thought of that one kiss will haunt throughout a lifetime.
ReplyDeleteSo glad you liked it Truedessa!
DeleteAll of your contrasts; rising and falling like waves, ripple to contentment. Nice one Carrie.
ReplyDeleteThanks for dropping by my blog today
Much love...
Thank you so much Gillena.
DeleteEchoing others, I love the swift switch of image throughout. The flicker remains human, as does that last held breath.
ReplyDeleteOh how I love this poem, especially "it is a million loads of laundry
ReplyDeleteand yet just one true kiss". Fantastic!
"A bird that flies away and home all at once" I like that!
ReplyDeleteThank you Qbit! By the way, I think it was a tie for you and Shay's fun poems!! 😊
DeleteWonderful opening quote. Too much living in too little time for sure. I like the events you chose to highlight in your poem.
ReplyDeleteI like that quote too. Thank you so much Lisa!
DeleteLove this contradictory road you have us traveling down.
ReplyDeleteExcellent writing, Carrie!
Thank you Sara! I really enjoyed yours too!
DeleteThe poem has so much movement. Made me feel like dancing a diagonal through the space of life, waltzing one two...to the right..one two...to the left....
ReplyDelete"and then floats on air like a ghost
ReplyDeleteit is a million loads of laundry
and yet just one true kiss
the kind one never forgets"
that's a great detail, this poem is bouncing full of life and energy, enjoyed it very much
I enjoyed this personification of the flame. I feel like I know all of these characters.
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